一、冗长的短语

学术论文写作切忌使用冗长的短语，使用复杂且长的句子并不能代表英语水平高，反而会使得语句晦涩、累赘。如果你没有发现自己正在使用冗长的短语，或者不知道自己犯了冗长的错误，那么笔者接下来就分享几个冗长短语示例，您可以对照一下，赶紧修改你的论文，只保留必要的单词和短语。

1. Due to the fact of/that…

Due to the fact of/that…就是一个典型的冗长短语，“Because”通常可以用来代替这个冗长的短语。

修改前: Due to the fact that more people are hiking in the Adirondacks, there have been more bear encounters.

修改后: Because more people are hiking in the Adirondacks, there have been more bear encounters.

2. It should be noted that…

It should be noted that…可以删掉，直接进入主题，丝毫不会影响句子的内容。

修改前: It should be noted that there were only 15 subjects in the study.

修改后: The study consisted of 15 subjects.

3. In consequence of this fact…

In consequence of this fact…可以直接替换成because of，并给出this fact具体指的是什么，方便读者阅读理解！

修改前: In consequence of this fact, we really do not know how much of an impact daily exercise has on a person's BMI.

修改后: Because of unreliable reporting and other factors, we really do not know how much of an impact daily exercise has on a person's BMI.

4. It's worth mentioning/it’s worth considering…

你是不是经常使用“It's worth mentioning/it's worth considering…”，这个句式非常文学化，并不适合我们严谨的学术论文。

修改前: It's worth considering whether the recent storm patterns are connected to glacier melt.

修改后: Recent storm patterns may be connected to glacier melt.

5. Further research is needed…

is needed to ...是不是你经常用到句型？删掉它，将被动句子改成主动句，效果更好。

修改前: Further research is needed to determine how extensive the damage to the intestinal wall is.

修改后: Future studies will gauge the extent to which intestinal walls are damaged.

6. In this essay/paper/study, we will…

你是不是经常会在论文introduction部分使用“In this essay/paper/study, we will… ”？

一般来说，没有明文规定论文一定要介绍你要做什么，有时这种叙述对引导读者是有帮助的。

删掉“In this essay/paper/study, we will… ”的内容，你会发现，这对于你的论文没有任何影响。

怎么样，修改掉论文中冗长的短语，是不是感觉句子变得清晰易读了？接下来，笔者再来说说SCI写作中经常会遇到的一些不精确的用语。

二、不精确用语

不精确用语可能是口语用语，多余的，不太正确的，它们在学术论文中是没有意义的。接下来给出2个不精确用语的示例。

7. End result

“End result”短语是多余的。 在大多数情况下，你可以简单地使用“result”或“results”，也可以用"... caused by..."。

修改前: The end result of more run-off is higher levels of bacteria in the water.

修改后: Higher levels of bacteria are caused by increased run-off.

8. On average

On average是一个不精确的术语，我们应该避免使用它。

修改前: Our results demonstrated that, on average, birds returned to the nest X number of times.

修改后: According to our results, birds returned to the nest an average number of X times.

三、陈旧的术语

陈旧的术语是一些曾经新鲜、新颖的短语，但由于使用了太多次，它们已经失去了影响力。 这种术语一般是研究领域的一些专业术语，也可以是一些过时的用语。

9.Sheds light

Sheds light的意思是使某事容易理解、阐明、揭示，通常用在杂志的封面信或摘要中。Sheds light是不常用、过时的短语，我们应该尽量避免使用它。Sheds light可以替换成suggest、determine。

修改前: This research sheds light on why monkeys engage in these behaviors.

修改后: This research suggests some reasons why monkeys engage in these behaviors.

修改后: This research determined why monkeys engage in these behaviors.

10. Paradigm shift

一些专业术语不常用，如果可能的话，最好更精确地描述发生了什么变化。

修改前: Donaldson's experiments resulted in a paradigm shift in current thought.

修改后: Donaldson's experiments have had some influence on current thinking.